The mystic violin

(to Cathie Lowmiller, with deep affection and appreciation :o)

Divine melody, your trace
sways, fills the dreamy summer air.
The bow, the fingers join a race
old feelings die; the soul’s free, bare.

Are feelings gone? have they been singed?
Let me vibrate, ignite my lightning…
Like “E” string trying to pierce the bridge.
Shake the complacent “me”, inviting

“awake and Feel, sing, be in tune
with Nature’s greatest orchestrator”
Song – green and primal, mystic rune…
Are we your violins, Creator?


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Your lines print a deep impression in me, deep down to low "E"(oh, even to "C#" on my tuned-down strings) of my soul. I'm a beginner here and I'm very glad to see a poet that writes in English. I have a couple of English lyrics and will be very pleased if you tell me something about them.

Fred   31.07.2002 16:24     Заявить о нарушении
Thanks for such wonderful words about my poetry.
I looked at a couple of your lyrics, I think they could use some improvement in grammar, but they show great feeling :o)

If you like, e-mail me your lyrics to Athena__73@SoftHome.net and when I have some free time, I could point out where the problems are.

Glad to see another musician!
Best of luck to you :o)

Athena

Athena   22.09.2002 09:30   Заявить о нарушении
Well I didn't know whether you would answer me or not, and it's great to hear your reply :) Concerning e-mail, if you won't mind, I'll send you tomorrow. I know that my grammar ain't the best, I've had very scarce practice, and it'll be very kind of you to tell me of my mistakes.

Fred   23.09.2002 16:29   Заявить о нарушении
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