Whole life is past so slowly step by step

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Whole life is past so slowly step by step
And walls are nothing more than bricks
That's why sometimes all what I'd like to have
Is just a cup of coffe in Twin Peaks.

I'd called  that midget: - Hey, you little scum,
Comme on and bring me now my cherry pie
Don't worry, pal, he wouldn't be so harmed,
He’s not a human he ain't gonna cry.

Just let the moon to shine above your head,
Without trying to redeem the night that’s gone,
Chill out, pal, we are already dead,
Let's talk, but please, turn off the dictophone.


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Without trying to redeem the night that’s gone
Отличная строчка.
В остальном надо поработать над грамматикой, есть ошибки:

Whole life is past so slowly step by step (перед whole должен быть артикль, либо местоимение)

That's why sometimes all what I'd like to have (all that I’d like to have)

Just let the moon shine above your head (to здесь неправильно)
Может есть ещё но это сразу бросается в глаза.

Николай Владимирович Ильин   11.04.2022 07:27     Заявить о нарушении