Ice

Жду обоснованной критики от знатоков английского языка)

1.
My frozen heart fast beats in vain,
My frozen heart - a dark of cold,
My frozen heart hurts me again,
My frozen heart... It is my fault.

Ice rings in words, ice shines in eyes,
My soul is frozen, fears rise...

P.F.
I've lost my faith once and forever,
And feelings fly as bits of glass.
I've fallen from my dreamy heaven.
Ice everywhere lives in us.
Ice...

2.
My frozen nerves aren't touched by pain,
My frozen nerves - a light of fire.
My frozen nerves are dead again,
My frozen nerves... It's my desire!

Ice froze in dreams, it's a nightmare.
But I hate it and I can't bear.

P.F.
I've lost my faith once and forever,
And feelings fly as bits of glass.
I've fallen from my dreamy heaven.
Ice everywhere lives in us.
Ice...

"My soul" - is just a castle of ice,
I wander here long time alone.
And I can see nobody's smiles,
But only tears can't be stones.

Frozen heart!
Frozen nerves!

P.F.
I've lost my faith once and forever,
And feelings fly as bits of glass.
I've fallen from my dreamy heaven.
Ice everywhere lives in us.