Rehearsing

One fine day,
Resting my head on your arm,
At ease with myself,
I will tell you all.
"And now," I'll say,
"I love you, but that is all."

I am rehearsing already,
And you don't even know that I exist.
 


Рецензии
I love nothing else but you?
Or love you but don't love anything else?
A bit unclear

Галина Иззьер   24.02.2015 08:10     Заявить о нарушении
Thank you, this is not good, I will rewrite that line. I meant, I love you, but that is all.

Евгения Саркисьянц   24.02.2015 17:30   Заявить о нарушении
Yes, this connotation is different. It also leaves room for interpretation but this is the way it should be

Галина Иззьер   25.02.2015 02:20   Заявить о нарушении
На это произведение написаны 3 рецензии, здесь отображается последняя, остальные - в полном списке.