Dedication

1.
Who holds the key to my future?
The palm of my hand, the candle,
The coffee cup and the mirror,
The card that waits to be opened,
My zodiac constellation.
I’ll gather them at my table,
I’ll ask them eternal questions.
They’ll tell me of many losses,
Of new wrinkles, of getting tired.
I’ll kick them out of my house:
Tell me something I don’t know already!
And I’ll sit in my room all alone.

2.
I'll sit in my room all alone
When you come through the door in silence.
You will tell me none of my fortune.
You will not console me with comfort.
We will have a tea, watch a movie.
We will talk about nothing special.
We will take up space with our bodies
And excite the air with our voices.
We don’t need to look at each other,
We both know and feel without looking:
Though we're bound by times and spaces,
We are not together forever.

3.
We are not together forever.
Forever is for the fairy
That comes to all sleeping children,
Forever is for the ogre
That lives in a shadowy forest,
Forever is for the hero
That finds his beautiful lady 
To live happily ever after.
While you’re next to me on the couch,
Sharing with me our old throw,
Holding my hand and smiling,
We are only here for this moment.

4.
We are only here for this moment.
You and I have covered much ground
But that ground is not what we cherish.
You and I have built understanding
But now’s not the time to be talking.
I'll just put my head on your shoulder
Like a swimmer rests on the water
When the ocean is breathing calmly,
And we’ll sit hand in hand in silence
As the rain outside gets stronger,
And I’ll take the key to my future
And throw it out the window.


Рецензии
These are just a couple of places which have raised the questions:
1) You will not console me with comfort - to console, to comfort - synonyms;
2) We will talk about nothing, seems to me stronger than "We will talk about nothing special"

С уважением,
Саша

Саша Казаков   08.10.2014 16:16     Заявить о нарушении
Console and comfort are synonyms but "to console with comfort" is not the same as, say, "to console with a song." Comfort has a very specific ability to console, and it is important to stress that the consolation takes place through creating comfort; as opposed to other means.

That said, I'll check again, thank you for raising this question.

Talk about nothing special - I insist on this one. :)

I appreciate the comments, thank you for taking your time to read and analyze!

Best, Janya

Евгения Саркисьянц   08.10.2014 17:30   Заявить о нарушении
На это произведение написаны 2 рецензии, здесь отображается последняя, остальные - в полном списке.

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