Mr. Spock

1. In the darkness of the mysterious space
all stars shine but their shine is not as bright
as the shine of eyes of people of your race (три OF в одном предложении?)
no doubt I know that I'm right.

Chor:
What a beautiful game, my hero!
But your starship've just passed by.
See: i stay in the middle of nowhere,
cause u've gone and didn't say good bye. (сочетание времен?)

2. Yes, I know, you have no feelings,
cause emotions don't suit you well.
But I beg you notice my tears (или там должен быть инфинитив: to notice?)
Maybe it will ring with you a bell. (можно ли дробить идиому таким образом?)

Ch.

3. Even icy stones melt in april,
so i hope your heart gets warmer too.
please, believe me and you'll be able
to feel love and happiness soon.

What a beautiful game, my hero!
But your starship've just passed by.
Stay with me in the middle of nowhere,
I will teach your soul how to fly.