What is it that I want so much?
What is it that makes me feel strange?
Is it missing your fingers’ touch?
Or my hunger for a revenge?
Why so angry with you whole day?
And so madly in love every night?
When will I see the better way
From this darkness to sparkling light?
All I need is to simply decide:
To forgive your betrayal or not.
All I want is to be on your side,
All I have is an endless road.
04.2014
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© Copyright: Алёнушка Ильхамовна, 2014
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All I, All I, All I... All I am sure, you may do better! :)
Also,
beknot
bowknot
cannot
knot
pinot
slipknot
snot
topknot
unknot
whatnot
The rest is good though. Though, band aids are best for the scratches, not for the feelings... ;)
Аскольд 20.01.2015 22:41 • Заявить о нарушении
Also,
beknot
bowknot
cannot
knot
pinot
slipknot
snot
topknot
unknot
whatnot
The rest is good though. Though, band aids are best for the scratches, not for the feelings... ;)
Аскольд 20.01.2015 22:41 • Заявить о нарушении
Thank you a lot for such a list of suggestions... here it was not about making it better, it was about putting feelings onto paper... therefore if you can get by with the rest which isn't that bad, I wouldn't change a word :)
(what happened to the secret gift? :))
Алёнушка Ильхамовна 22.01.2015 01:49 Заявить о нарушении
(what happened to the secret gift? :))
Алёнушка Ильхамовна 22.01.2015 01:49 Заявить о нарушении
На это произведение написаны 2 рецензии, здесь отображается последняя, остальные - в полном списке.