About us

We were so proud of detachment,
When all it seemed to be so great,
I tried avoiding that attachment,
And you refused to face your fate.

We met one warm October evening,
When lights were out in every street.
I was about those folders keeping.
And you were resting in the seat.

The next forthcoming our meeting
Was so expected and towards
I heard your heart so fastly beating,
And dared I to say some words.

And every time when I’m with you,
When seeing eyes and hearing laughter
Persisting fire goes through-
My soul needs cure hereafter.


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Прекрасно срифмовано. Но, на мой взгляд, несколько отстранённо. Холодновато. Спасибо.

Джи-Мэн   22.11.2013 22:45     Заявить о нарушении
А я решила прислушаться к совету и писать менее пафосно и эмоционально)
Благодарю за визит, Джи-Мэн!

Анастасия Карпова86   22.11.2013 22:50   Заявить о нарушении