my Italian song

He became my Italian song,
My Visa to th’ country of love
It can take all my time lifelong
To learn the song stated above

With him I knew Italian passion
Feeling awe, and trembling legs
As in the crater of Vesuvius, in his jaws ashen
He helped awaken this lava of sense

Maybe for you I’m a piece of pizza:
For a couple of minutes of pleasure.
You’re for me - never falling Pisa
I'm for you – just antidepressive measure


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очень красиво, даже ошибок явных не вижу.
только Вы уверены в "helped awaken"? helped to awake?
Nevertheless, it was a pleasure to read your poem, thank you.

Юлия Азорова   08.06.2013 19:10     Заявить о нарушении
Спасибо большое! awaken/awake вариативно, а вот help to, конечно, будет более корректно, скорее всего Вы правы.

Тина Криско   08.06.2013 19:40   Заявить о нарушении