Who do you think you are?

Элла Полякова 1

Who do you think you are? —
Center of my universe
I fell, accidentally, in,
Due to insanity.

Who do you think you are?
Creator of a perfect trap —
Better than any crabber
Has ever set in the river.

There is no any need
For any kind of a cage.
Just your unearthly smile
After uneasy grin.

Who do you think you are? —
Capturer of my soul.
You making me freez in love
Exactly as I always wanted.

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Hello, Ella! I've noticed just a few minor mistakes. Here are the corrections:

1) After AN uneasy grin

3) Exactly as I've always wanted

The third correction is optional, really. Anyway, thank you for the poem!

Sincerely,

Денис Водяхин 04.09.2021 22:31 • Заявить о нарушении

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Hello, Dennis!Thank you very much for your imput. I guess when I wrote this poem I wasn't thinking about grammar very much. For now I will leave it as it is. But still I appreciate your kindness and desire to help. I wish I could give such thoughtful and intelligent reviews as you do.
Thanks again,
I wish you a great success in writing and everything you do.

Ella

Элла Полякова 1 06.09.2021 05:20 Заявить о нарушении

Doesn't matter if your reviews are "thoughtful and intelligent" or not. Anything counts! :)

Best wishes,

Денис Водяхин 06.09.2021 06:01 Заявить о нарушении

Besides, I didn't even know my reviews are thoughtful and intelligent, but if you say so... I'll take that as a compliment.

Денис Водяхин 06.09.2021 07:31 Заявить о нарушении

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