Who would describe the eyes of bird
That flies so high in sky of world?
We have bright Sun above our heads,
It warms our love which never ends.
Look into eyes of human being!
Where can be seen just everything?
In them can be it seen. Reflect
The same desire to protect,
Take care of the best in life:
The Earth and Nature, Mother, Wife,
All different creatures big and small...
Great Love to Life - one for us all!
Love to Life
© Copyright: Александр Хваловский, 2012
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The theme is nice, the idea is nice, but the poem needs some work. It just doesn’t seem right. (“In them can be if yours reflect”?) To start off, you may want to correct "prootect" and "dufferent".
Good luck~
Helen.
Елена Бингхэм 08.02.2012 20:50 • Заявить о нарушении
Good luck~
Helen.
Елена Бингхэм 08.02.2012 20:50 • Заявить о нарушении
My dear Helen! You are right
- Stars through the clouds don't seem bright.
Your eyes reflect eternal light
Of human soul with all might.
We'll start together something new
From our common point of view.
P.S. Thanks for your commentary. From Russia with love!
Александр Хваловский 20.03.2012 03:52 Заявить о нарушении
- Stars through the clouds don't seem bright.
Your eyes reflect eternal light
Of human soul with all might.
We'll start together something new
From our common point of view.
P.S. Thanks for your commentary. From Russia with love!
Александр Хваловский 20.03.2012 03:52 Заявить о нарушении
I am very glad you took my words the right way! :) My intentions were not to offend your work, by any means, but just to give it some constructive criticism. I make mistakes too! )))
Cheers!
Helen.
Елена Бингхэм 20.03.2012 04:15 Заявить о нарушении
Cheers!
Helen.
Елена Бингхэм 20.03.2012 04:15 Заявить о нарушении
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