The girls - is like a cats
We always search for milk
The heart, what can’t forget
and fingers - like a silk…
We like to make ambush
and time-to-time - look at....
we want it - touch and push -
Like playful pussy-cat
The love - is our name
Accept it? It's your choice
But all we need - is game
And bowl of milk, of course
like a cats
© Copyright: Легкая Ложь, 2011
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Sorry for saying it, but it's awful in terms of grammar mistakes.
First of all 'the girls' are plural thay can't be used with the verb 'is'. It will be even better if you skip the verb 'to be', so that there will be something like 'The girls - like cats'.
Secondly, 'cats' are also in plural, so there can't be used an article 'a'. There shouldn't be used any article, in truth.
Next, ther should be 'the heart, THAT can't forget', not 'what'.
I have just one request. Please, don't publish verces where there are so many mistakes. Check in firstly. It's very unpleasant to read such a mockery above the language.
Thanks you for attention. Hope next time it will be much better.
Леночка Азарова 29.09.2011 15:23 • Заявить о нарушении
First of all 'the girls' are plural thay can't be used with the verb 'is'. It will be even better if you skip the verb 'to be', so that there will be something like 'The girls - like cats'.
Secondly, 'cats' are also in plural, so there can't be used an article 'a'. There shouldn't be used any article, in truth.
Next, ther should be 'the heart, THAT can't forget', not 'what'.
I have just one request. Please, don't publish verces where there are so many mistakes. Check in firstly. It's very unpleasant to read such a mockery above the language.
Thanks you for attention. Hope next time it will be much better.
Леночка Азарова 29.09.2011 15:23 • Заявить о нарушении