Blues

I love my baby, my baby doesn't love me...
He looks for his Angel.
The most beautiful angel in a beautiful world.
With a wonderful face, with a wonderful soul.
When he  finds his Angel, I'll be forever alone...

I love to be alone. It's rattling
But I just love my baby more.
I wonna be your Angel, baby
why not you fell with me in love

I wonna be your Angel
And I have wings, I'm randy
I'm evil troll for you
And harmonious friend

I love my baby. My baby can't love me
He can't see my magic soul
He just can concern the wall
He looks for his Angel...
Or maybe he looks for my universal love?


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Please, dear AUTHOR!!!MIND YOUR SPELLING AND BASIC GRAMMAR!!!otherwise write in Russian!!!! "my baby DOESN'T love me". "He LOOKS for his Angel". "When he FINDS his Angel, I'll be forever alone", etc. Here you have too many BLUNDERS...HONESTLY, first give your poems to someone who KNOWS ENGLISH!!!

Оксана Соловьева   21.01.2010 15:27     Заявить о нарушении
хм но первая то строчка была взята из блюза Р. Джонсона.. там так. Хотя я согласна с вами насчет грамматики. Но значит Роберт Джонсон тоже нарушил....

Ларри Лизард   21.01.2010 15:39   Заявить о нарушении
I love my baby, my baby don't love me
I love my baby, ooooh, my baby don't love me
But I really love that woman, can't stand to leave her be

Ларри Лизард   21.01.2010 16:18   Заявить о нарушении
Larry, I understand your aspirations and appreciate them anyways:) But in this case you'd better start with prologue, placing the lines of the song-writer before you start your poem...Then it would sound a little more familiar to all unprepared readers!:)

Оксана Соловьева   21.01.2010 17:33   Заявить о нарушении
Yes... I thought about it, but i've wanted to make this line a inseparable part of my poem. This is very easy and popular phrase. It's key to sense of this sketch

Ларри Лизард   21.01.2010 18:18   Заявить о нарушении