Refusal

This way so long as life-
The way from you to me.
I'll never be your wife
How you can not to see.

I'm stronger than you think.
I do believe in fate.
I should be more than sick
To be with you for rate.

Forgive me my mistakes-
I'm weaker than you think.
You showed me who I am
And now should hide the ring.


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Couple points.

I would say:
This way's as long as life - introducing short form of IS and not adding any syllable make more sense to sentence.

I'm stronger then you think. - I'm stronger than you think.
I should be more then sick - I should be more than sick

Андрей Уран   18.10.2011 03:47     Заявить о нарушении
I absolutely agree with you. Thank you for your remark. We should do our best or do nothing.

Анастасия Кат   18.10.2011 04:04   Заявить о нарушении
"We should do our best or do nothing" – quite frequently something between those extremes works fine ...

Андрей Уран   18.10.2011 05:15   Заявить о нарушении