I understood...but maybe late,
This Paradise - it wasn't ours.
You've left my life, you've shut the gate,
You've left me in the cold old house.
You were a lot of things for me:
My Sun, my Destiny, my Chance.
I understood - words nothing mean
If they are lying, if they're false.
And in this silence cold and lifeless
I'm slowly dying - it's my part...
You've left my life, you've left my house,
But haven't left my soul and heart.
I understood...
© Copyright: Ирина Вихрь, 2009
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Loved the twist in the third quatrain. :-)
Loved the mood of the poem (I take a special pleasure in sad love poems).
Shall you like to discuss some of my constructive remarks about your poem (grammar) - let me know (we can do it by e-mails).
If you have some remarks about my poems - I'll be only glad to hear them.
Continue writing in English, Irina!
You've done a good job!
Sincerely, Sveta
Света Лебедева 27.01.2009 04:30 • Заявить о нарушении
Loved the mood of the poem (I take a special pleasure in sad love poems).
Shall you like to discuss some of my constructive remarks about your poem (grammar) - let me know (we can do it by e-mails).
If you have some remarks about my poems - I'll be only glad to hear them.
Continue writing in English, Irina!
You've done a good job!
Sincerely, Sveta
Света Лебедева 27.01.2009 04:30 • Заявить о нарушении
Thank you, Svetlana. But there is no problem to discuss my mistakes even here))
Ирина Вихрь 27.01.2009 14:28 Заявить о нарушении
Ирина Вихрь 27.01.2009 14:28 Заявить о нарушении
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