No more pain, no more leis,
No more hurt that live inside
No more tears and no more stress
Now I’m finding my happiness in Death
Now I’m finding my happiness in Death
No more hate, no more tears
No more higher in your feels
No more pill and no more stress
Now I’m finding my happiness in Death
Now I’m finding my happiness in Death
Cous I’m finding my Death in your eyes…
Happiness in Death
© Copyright: Валерия Рэтрак, 2008
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The poem sounds like a song. Do you have a tune for it?
I noticed a few typos:
No more pain, no more liEs,
No more hurt that liveS inside
No more pillS and no more stress
What do you try to say in the following line?
No more higher in your feels
I have hard time processing it.
Nice work!
Сам Вадим 24.11.2009 20:44 • Заявить о нарушении
I noticed a few typos:
No more pain, no more liEs,
No more hurt that liveS inside
No more pillS and no more stress
What do you try to say in the following line?
No more higher in your feels
I have hard time processing it.
Nice work!
Сам Вадим 24.11.2009 20:44 • Заявить о нарушении
Да...это и есть песня...или ее подобие...(No more higher in your feels)-этим я хотела сказать, что " нет возвышенности больше в твоих чуствах"
Валерия Рэтрак 01.02.2009 08:14 Заявить о нарушении
Валерия Рэтрак 01.02.2009 08:14 Заявить о нарушении
No more higher in your feels
doe not work here
Higher feeling are also called lofty. Try working with loftiness here.
Сам Вадим 08.02.2009 00:26 Заявить о нарушении
doe not work here
Higher feeling are also called lofty. Try working with loftiness here.
Сам Вадим 08.02.2009 00:26 Заявить о нарушении
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