When the sun is going down
And the world is blurred with dusk,
I can feel my dreams around -
They conquer my mind too fast.
Desperation changes my soul,
I cannot control desire...
All my feelings take me over -
I'm being burned without fire.
There is no one who can save me,
But just you, whom I can trust;
I know everything, don't tell me...
Come and stay with me for once.
Though we'll never be together,
I cannot believe it's true -
It is so cold and scary
To be here without you.
B minor
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Apologies for intrusion, Elgil. Yet, I offer you my version of your vision :)
When the sun is going down,
And the world is blurred with dusk
I can sense, my dreams surround
Mind of mine, in conquest fast.
Desperation rocks my soul,
I cannot control desire...
Ardor feelings take all over,
Setting me ablaze, sans fire.
There is no one to save me,
None but you, who I can trust;
I know everything, don't tell me...
Come, please comfort me, for once!
Though, we'll never be together,
I cannot believe it's true -
I am cold in darkness scary
Burnt to ash, without you.
Fern 28.05.2008 00:12 • Заявить о нарушении
When the sun is going down,
And the world is blurred with dusk
I can sense, my dreams surround
Mind of mine, in conquest fast.
Desperation rocks my soul,
I cannot control desire...
Ardor feelings take all over,
Setting me ablaze, sans fire.
There is no one to save me,
None but you, who I can trust;
I know everything, don't tell me...
Come, please comfort me, for once!
Though, we'll never be together,
I cannot believe it's true -
I am cold in darkness scary
Burnt to ash, without you.
Fern 28.05.2008 00:12 • Заявить о нарушении
Thanks, interesting version...You live in Britain, right? I can see the difference from American English.
Эльгиль 28.05.2008 19:41 Заявить о нарушении
Эльгиль 28.05.2008 19:41 Заявить о нарушении
nope, I never lived in the UK, love London though - perhaps some day, I'll move there, but not in the immediate future :) You?
Fern 31.05.2008 13:41 Заявить о нарушении
Fern 31.05.2008 13:41 Заявить о нарушении
interesting...your english is definitely pure british.
i live in NYC.
Эльгиль 31.05.2008 21:43 Заявить о нарушении
i live in NYC.
Эльгиль 31.05.2008 21:43 Заявить о нарушении
Sweet! Check this one out then :)
http://stihi.ru/2006/04/19-359
Fern 01.06.2008 13:26 Заявить о нарушении
http://stihi.ru/2006/04/19-359
Fern 01.06.2008 13:26 Заявить о нарушении