I will

I lost my faith,
In you and me,
And lost my strength,
Somehow I seem
To breath the air
And see more dreams...
You think it's fair??
To me it seems
Like useless false -
Just ordinary stuff...
I'll look for you...
I will ....
 my love...


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I will...
He feel...
This seems...
The dreams...

...
And even though
That poem shines
Who'll end those rhymeless
Shorty lines?

Озорнин Прохор Николаевич   25.02.2007 14:59     Заявить о нарушении
Can't see a problem with those lines,
In English -poem- if it rhymes,
They're short I understand, my dear,
However, that's the point - the idea!

Ронечка   26.02.2007 03:52   Заявить о нарушении
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