Strange…but only once
I could truly love in this life,
One time I cold smile so bright
Looking into his soul, seeing myself in his eyes.
That feeling so special was long ago
But I remember the strength it gave me to go,
I remember how all this lighted my way
And how it added me wisdom day after day.
My friend, it was you to whom I gave it all
Everything I had till the very last drop
Never no more after you I felt the same,
A bit empty inside now but I have no regret.
I’ll never forget neither you nor the past
Only the sweetest memory will live in my heart
I’ll remember the time when we were free and young
The best of all I had, my tender First love.
First love
© Copyright: Оксана Резник, 2007
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nice rhyme,a bit flat imho. You write about such a strong harricane feling and use such a simple "descros". For exmaple of it I would recemmend Shakespear.
Dimitry
Or mine))))):
You rhyme so pure, my friend
Yours feeling's sincere's so clear
But I have nothing but tend
To correct the descriptions sphere.
Of course I would never contest
Your right as poet here
For rhyme, for inmagine, for tests
But use more emotions, dear
Please, do not take offence
Brilliant imagination
WARM
Dimitry
Димитрий Волжанин 20.02.2007 12:46 • Заявить о нарушении
Dimitry
Or mine))))):
You rhyme so pure, my friend
Yours feeling's sincere's so clear
But I have nothing but tend
To correct the descriptions sphere.
Of course I would never contest
Your right as poet here
For rhyme, for inmagine, for tests
But use more emotions, dear
Please, do not take offence
Brilliant imagination
WARM
Dimitry
Димитрий Волжанин 20.02.2007 12:46 • Заявить о нарушении
Слово "harricane" пишется hurricane, слово "exmpale" пишется - example, "recemmend" - пишется recommend, а слова "descros" вообще не существует. Прежде чем давать мне рекоммендации по стилю написания стихов на английском, научитесь хотя бы просто граммотно на этом языке писать.
Оксана Резник 20.02.2007 21:48 Заявить о нарушении
Оксана Резник 20.02.2007 21:48 Заявить о нарушении
Sorry, that you offended, and much more sorry, that you pointed my misprints out! Simple technique to test for somebody's mind presence or absence - works every time. Sorry, you’ve failed... No more reviews at least from my side...
Nevertheless, Still, I'd implore you to think for more emotion... in you lyrics ... friend!
...
Sincerely yours,
Dimitry
Димитрий Волжанин 21.02.2007 09:49 Заявить о нарушении
Nevertheless, Still, I'd implore you to think for more emotion... in you lyrics ... friend!
...
Sincerely yours,
Dimitry
Димитрий Волжанин 21.02.2007 09:49 Заявить о нарушении