The Colour of Your Dream

Елена Слепушкина

What’s the colour of your dream?
Do you think that it is green?
Maybe yellow, blue or red…
Are you happy? Are you sad?
What’s the colour of your pain?
Black or orange? Hatred? Rain?
I won’t let you feel so sad,
I will never treat you bad!
What’s the matter with your love?
There’s an angel high above:
He will help you to survive,
He will set your soul alive.
Just believe me, it is true:
I will always follow you.
No matter where you stay,
I will never turn away!
Please, don’t put my love in doubt.
Shall I always be around?
What’s the colour of your dream?
No doubt, dream is green!

26.01.04

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I feel my personal dreams are green. That is the exact colour of the Great energy of the Universe.
Green turning into violet.....

The poem is good by meaning and thought incorporated into it.
I was a bit stumbling because of the rhythm. I think that may be polished a bit.
Rgds

Sagittarius 25.04.2016 13:48 • Заявить о нарушении

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Thank you very much indeed. I used to write in English when I was very young, that's why the rythm was not perfect. Nowadays I don't write like that because I see that very few people read English poems as well as poems in other languages... But it's only my opinion. Maybe I'm wrong.
Best regards, Elena

Елена Слепушкина 25.04.2016 15:13 Заявить о нарушении

I do read in English both native speakers and those of another tongues trying luck in English poem making.
I tried a bit myself. Difficult and challenging.

One shall sense the tongue, not just know the rules. That is a really hard endeavor

Sagittarius 25.04.2016 15:18 Заявить о нарушении

Yes, you are absolutely right. Maybe it's worth trying to write anyway, no matter if someone reads it or not. In our Norh Ossetia republic people understand Ossetian and Russian, but not English. I can only write poems for my friends from Spain or Nederland, who are able to understand them... Thanks a lot for the opportunity to talk in English... Regards, Helena

Елена Слепушкина 25.04.2016 16:52 Заявить о нарушении

Lena, I am dead sure in any case it is worth efforts of keeping your knowledge of the foreign language after so much efforthad been paid to learn it.
Please have a read of what I have managed to do myself in that respect poem-wise.
http://www.stihi.ru/2009/10/27/4286

wishing all the very best

Konstantin

Sagittarius 26.04.2016 17:17 Заявить о нарушении

Thanks a lot, it's a wonderful poem. Sincerely, Helena

Елена Слепушкина 26.04.2016 18:06 Заявить о нарушении

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