We children, of new generation
Are free to do, all that we want
And we shall not suffer, some complications
Freedom - we sing,
And it must nicely work!
Freedom style, can you see it in the sky?
Freedom style, have you feel how you can fly?
Freedom style, I have never tried to cry,
Freedom style – it’s my life, freedom style!
You see we are not such as the others
We independent of pleasures on Earth
Wipe out yourself and you cannot recover,
Waiting the help of somebody else.
Freedom that’s our mark
It is visible even in the dark!
Freedom style
© Copyright: Вечно Скорбящая, 2006
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Очень понравилось, Ledy! И смысл, и идея, и рифма…
Some notes:
“And it must to work!” – please remove “to”; perhaps, add “nicely”, “firmly”, or “stiffly” between “must” and “work” to fit better for your lyrics
“You see we not such, as each other“ – change to “You see we are not such as the others”; otherwise, it does not make much sense.
“can not” – change to “cannot”.
“in dark!“ – change “even in the dark!”
“She is visible even in dark!” – unless, you emphasize on Freedom in special way (like the Statue of Liberty), it shall read as “It is visible even in the dark!”
Would you like some taste of mine:
http://www.stihi.ru/2006/06/17-439
http://www.stihi.ru/2006/06/14-2087
Михаил Хитрик 05.07.2006 23:09 • Заявить о нарушении
Some notes:
“And it must to work!” – please remove “to”; perhaps, add “nicely”, “firmly”, or “stiffly” between “must” and “work” to fit better for your lyrics
“You see we not such, as each other“ – change to “You see we are not such as the others”; otherwise, it does not make much sense.
“can not” – change to “cannot”.
“in dark!“ – change “even in the dark!”
“She is visible even in dark!” – unless, you emphasize on Freedom in special way (like the Statue of Liberty), it shall read as “It is visible even in the dark!”
Would you like some taste of mine:
http://www.stihi.ru/2006/06/17-439
http://www.stihi.ru/2006/06/14-2087
Михаил Хитрик 05.07.2006 23:09 • Заявить о нарушении
Very well!!! I am glad to hear that. Somehow I immediately recalled “and I try, and I try, and I try…”
I can't get no satisfaction
I can't get no satisfaction
'cause i try and i try and i try and i try
I can't get no, i can't get no
When i'm drivin' in my car
And that man comes on the radio
He's tellin' me more and more
About some useless information
Supposed to fire my imagination
I can't get no, oh no no no
Hey hey hey, that's what i say
I can't get no satisfaction
I can't get no satisfaction
'cause i try and i try and i try and i try
I can't get no, i can't get no
When i'm watchin' my tv
And that man comes on to tell me
How white my shirts can be
But he can't be a man 'cause he doesn't smoke
The same cigarrettes as me
I can't get no, oh no no no
Hey hey hey, that's what i say
I can't get no satisfaction
I can't get no girl reaction
'cause i try and i try and i try and i try
I can't get no, i can't get no
When i'm ridin' round the world
And i'm doin' this and i'm signing that
And i'm tryin' to make some girl
Who tells me baby better come back later next week
'cause you see i'm on losing streak
I can't get no, oh no no no
Hey hey hey, that's what i say
I can't get no, i can't get no
I can't get no satisfaction
No satisfaction, no satisfaction, no satisfaction
Would you like to continue with some others of your English lyrics?
Михаил Хитрик 06.07.2006 01:53 Заявить о нарушении
I can't get no satisfaction
I can't get no satisfaction
'cause i try and i try and i try and i try
I can't get no, i can't get no
When i'm drivin' in my car
And that man comes on the radio
He's tellin' me more and more
About some useless information
Supposed to fire my imagination
I can't get no, oh no no no
Hey hey hey, that's what i say
I can't get no satisfaction
I can't get no satisfaction
'cause i try and i try and i try and i try
I can't get no, i can't get no
When i'm watchin' my tv
And that man comes on to tell me
How white my shirts can be
But he can't be a man 'cause he doesn't smoke
The same cigarrettes as me
I can't get no, oh no no no
Hey hey hey, that's what i say
I can't get no satisfaction
I can't get no girl reaction
'cause i try and i try and i try and i try
I can't get no, i can't get no
When i'm ridin' round the world
And i'm doin' this and i'm signing that
And i'm tryin' to make some girl
Who tells me baby better come back later next week
'cause you see i'm on losing streak
I can't get no, oh no no no
Hey hey hey, that's what i say
I can't get no, i can't get no
I can't get no satisfaction
No satisfaction, no satisfaction, no satisfaction
Would you like to continue with some others of your English lyrics?
Михаил Хитрик 06.07.2006 01:53 Заявить о нарушении
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