Day of winning – holy day,
Souls of deads will fly away.
Ninth of May – the end of war
No one die – not any more.
It was it – to much it was.
Blood and mess of them, who swore
We are people just because
So much dieing there was.
Start and end of deadfall word –
Are the holidays. Who told
That four years isn’t much,
War was era, it’s too much.
Ninth of May
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Sergey,
I'm not an expert, but couldn't help but point out the obvious mistakes... nevermind the articles, and the meaning :)
Day of winning – holy day,
Souls of *dead* will fly away.
Ninth of May – the end of war
No one *dies* – not any more.
*That* was it – *too* much it was.
Blood and mess of *those* who swore
Now *we’re* people, just because
So much dying *(suffering?)* there was.
Start and end of deadfall word –
Are the holidays. Who *said*
That four years isn’t much,
War was era, it’s too much.
Although the 2nd World War lasted longer than 4 years for many nations and people still die in battles all around the globe, thank you for remembering the the Victory Day. But why in English?! :)
Sincerely,
Матильда Ку 29.04.2006 07:11 • Заявить о нарушении
I'm not an expert, but couldn't help but point out the obvious mistakes... nevermind the articles, and the meaning :)
Day of winning – holy day,
Souls of *dead* will fly away.
Ninth of May – the end of war
No one *dies* – not any more.
*That* was it – *too* much it was.
Blood and mess of *those* who swore
Now *we’re* people, just because
So much dying *(suffering?)* there was.
Start and end of deadfall word –
Are the holidays. Who *said*
That four years isn’t much,
War was era, it’s too much.
Although the 2nd World War lasted longer than 4 years for many nations and people still die in battles all around the globe, thank you for remembering the the Victory Day. But why in English?! :)
Sincerely,
Матильда Ку 29.04.2006 07:11 • Заявить о нарушении
I'am sorry, but many of those things which you marked "*" are right and about "...we people...", it was motto of Americans.
P.S. Anyway - thanks for opinion.
Сергей Косяков 29.04.2006 12:35 Заявить о нарушении
P.S. Anyway - thanks for opinion.
Сергей Косяков 29.04.2006 12:35 Заявить о нарушении
Вы уж меня простите, Сергей, наверное не надо писать подобных рецензий. Просто иногда кажется, что нельзя не высказаться. Рецензия - это как мостик :) I know I'm a perfectionist. But there's more good in it than bad (if tamed :)
Без обид, а?
Матильда Ку 29.04.2006 19:05 Заявить о нарушении
Без обид, а?
Матильда Ку 29.04.2006 19:05 Заявить о нарушении
Приношу извинение ( хоть и чуть-чуть запоздалое ) за резкость.
Сергей Косяков 18.06.2006 23:13 Заявить о нарушении
Сергей Косяков 18.06.2006 23:13 Заявить о нарушении