My life

Well today is day of hate
I’ve got something to create
It will be terrible and great
‘Cause today is day of hate

Well today is day of joy
I’ve got something to destroy
I will everyone annoy
So today is day of joy

I’m alive cause I’m not dead
Well that’s all. Goodbye. The end.


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Dear Svetlana.
I love this limerick. Great job!
PS It looks like there are misprints in lines 5- obvious,9("dead" instead of "death"), 10 ("Goodbye") Also please consider "I'll be terrible and great" in line 3 to match line 7.
PS2 Misprint in La Folia line 8 "feel" instead of "fill"
Best regards dear.
Yours Yankee:)

Янки   11.01.2004 03:29     Заявить о нарушении
Thank you, Yankee!
My spelling is really terrible
I'll think about what you've written
But why do you call it limerick?

Светлана Воронцова   12.01.2004 15:02   Заявить о нарушении
Dear Svetlana.
You are right your poem does not match the exact definition of “limerick”. Thank you for considering my remark. As for the spelling, typing in Word and pasting to stihi.ru takes care of many misprints.
I wish you the best, dear.
Yours truly, Yankee:)

Янки   28.01.2004 03:11   Заявить о нарушении