I look to the sky.
So warm and close stars...
I look inside me.
I feel... I look... I ask...
I look
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Hi, Rixt!
Just wanted to help you a bit with this stanza.
I'm looking at the sky:
How close and warm are stars!
I look inside of me.
I look... and feel... and ask...
Instead of these "and's" in the last line could be "I's" or "then's". The choise is yours. ;)
Regards,
George
Чёрный Георг 05.01.2007 05:20 • Заявить о нарушении
Just wanted to help you a bit with this stanza.
I'm looking at the sky:
How close and warm are stars!
I look inside of me.
I look... and feel... and ask...
Instead of these "and's" in the last line could be "I's" or "then's". The choise is yours. ;)
Regards,
George
Чёрный Георг 05.01.2007 05:20 • Заявить о нарушении