Magiccraft

I’m looking into deepest wells
They might be tunnels I suppose
They echo thoughts like wizard’s spells
I fear feelings they expose
They might be sins they might be errors
They might be deeply hidden love
They might be swords or golden arrows
Which disappeared leaving no trace above
I stay with all my mighty words on rocks which look
like sandy hills and sizzling mobs
like birds of prey absorb my Soul,
my Love, my Will.


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Well, it seems to be my turn to say, that I'm REALLY IMPRESSED. Not seems - it is. & I think that it (the poem) sounds even better when not simply read, but read aloud,for in this way you feel every "S" with you own tongue...Very beautiful. Very melodic. You know, a real "echo" is heard in each line. (Changing the 8th line is a great idea)
Best wishes,

Энн Сьюард   06.06.2003 19:57     Заявить о нарушении
Well, I'm happy we see it eye to eye.
Thanks a lot.
Best wishes

Валео Лученко   09.06.2003 11:33   Заявить о нарушении
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