Only now I understand
How you have never been kind and never cared,
Only now I realize
How you despise me for always being there.
I see it clearly now -
The way you took me for granted,
And all the mockery and rudeness,
And your cruel, harsh laugh
When I tried to show you the golden city,
The city of white towers,
Beautiful in the pale starlight,
Stunning in the light of the day.
So, pitiful and useless were my lies,
And anyway I'm nothing in your life -
Because I love you too much,
Because I dread your indifference
At the sight of my open heart.
Only Now
© Copyright: Celena Costello, 2002
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Well, this time I have to be a bit critical. I hope you don't mind.
What I liked:
The last stanza. "So, pitiful and useless were my lies" and
"Because I dread your indifference\At the sight of my open heart." This lines ring true.
What I didn't like:
The first two stanzas seem too straightforward. It's something any hurt woman can say about her man. So there is nothing special about it.
-- Alex
Fungible Anabiosis 09.10.2002 03:48 • Заявить о нарушении
What I liked:
The last stanza. "So, pitiful and useless were my lies" and
"Because I dread your indifference\At the sight of my open heart." This lines ring true.
What I didn't like:
The first two stanzas seem too straightforward. It's something any hurt woman can say about her man. So there is nothing special about it.
-- Alex
Fungible Anabiosis 09.10.2002 03:48 • Заявить о нарушении
Thank you for your comment. Yes, now that I think of it, the beginning of the poem does seem a bit trivial. I should have written something more original. I'm glad you liked at least some lines, though.
Celena
Celena Costello 09.10.2002 22:38 Заявить о нарушении
Celena
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