February review of english poetry on stihi. ru

Hello voracious poetry reader!

I plan to write these reviews in English, because practice makes perfect!
(If you feel you need a Russian translation please let me know - Если вы считаете что нужен русский перевод, дайте мне знать, если наберётся достаточно желающих, то я постараюсь переводить все обзоры)


Here's my first attempt at reviewing some deserving work in English of stihi.ru poets. I will not judge my own poetry and translations into English, if you'd like, they are located here:   [http://www.stihi.ru/author.html?Athena]

I'd like to start with a reminder of great composer Giuseppe Verde, during the rehearsals to his operas, he asked that all the doors will be locked shut. Why? His areas (words and music) were so "easy on the ears", people absorbed them so well, that some of them made their ways to restaurants and bars before the opera's opening night.
Such is the power of well written verse and music.
It's also true that cutesy rhymes are boring, but as you're starting out, why not try creating something that is just pleasant to read, later you can work at becoming more deep and profound.

I'd like to quote a good playwright, Richard Brinsley Sheridan and the Epilogue of his play, "The Rivals":

The wandering tar, who not for years has press'd,
The widow'd partner of his day of rest,
On the cold deck, far from her arms removed,
Still hums the ditty which his Susan loved;
And while around the cadence rude is blown,
The boatswain whistles in a softer tone.

(tar is an abbreviated word for a tarpaulin, which means a sailor)

So let's create some hummable poems and ditties! :o)

What's deserving and worthy of a review?

a) grammatically correct
b) meaningful and inspirational.
с) author shows promise - works on their grammar, style, depth, etc.

What did I see this month? Lots of “love-dove”, “see-me”, and other extremely trite rhymes. If your poem rhymes like a country and western song and the words are boring, where the reader can predict what the next rhyme will be, they will read it once (out of courtesy and grinding teeth all the while), but they will not pass it on to their friends, saying, “here, read this!”
(Unfortunately my own work is not immune from this).

What I did not see this month: profound thought, but that's ok - it just means there . When we’re hurt we write, it seems to flow from inside and be guided, as if by someone else, by “the magic hand of chance” ©. But poetry is much more than “woe on me, without you I can’t see” (straight); it is a statement of the world around us, of political, environmental, and psychological undercurrents that surround us. I’m not saying, dust an old philosophy book and then write a great ode! Nope, just go out into the world thinking, today I will write something that will touch someone’s mind and my passion for writing will help them see the world from a unique and different perspective.

<author_login=arelf72>  Untimely Death

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/01-70]



[author_login=kittysweety] - the second poem is cute!

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/02-225]

This is very nice indeed!

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/18-62]


[author_login=snark]

This next poem has several blatant mistakes in English, but it's dreamy, beautiful quality smacks of Eliot and Yates:
[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/05-714]

[author_login=siddy]

This poem is not bad, shows some promise.
[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/07-804]

[author_login=shapenko]

This poem is not immune from grammatical errors, but has great feeling.
[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/07-365]

[author_login=monstera]

If you ask “me” – this is cute!

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/12-211]

This is also a nice, wistful poem

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/27-243]


[author_login=lisica]

This poem has mistakes in English, and yet is a rather original work

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/14-672]

[author_login=mercury]

Childish as heck, but cute

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/14-54]

[author_login=yvk]

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/16-68]



[author_login=aerina]

Don’t know whether jellyfishes live in lakes, but this poem is touching and romantic.

[http://www.stihi.ru/2002/02/19-430]

See you in the months to come! :o)